I was not happy with it.
I caught sight of an 11thC illumination from a psalter (see b/w image below) and I knew what had to be done. With a flourish of new paint I over-painted 90% of it - fantastic - I felt alive.
With minor adjustments this afternoon (sat) I will leave it again.
It is ten times better and probably ten times more difficult to sell! Lets stick with better.
That psalter image showed me how to emphasize the division of the work - making it much more powerful, this I did boldly with blue and thereafter it told me what was required. I bow to the 11C. men.